On Thursday, Sreejit announced that this week’s Dungeon Prompt will be the last of the year due to his upcoming Walking with Intention event. He proposed that we write about Family.
Around the same time I read an echo poem written by Oliana on Traces of the Soul. I decided to see if I could create a poem using that style.
Oliana stated that in an echo poem “the last syllable or two of a main line is repeated, perhaps with different spelling or meaning, as if an echo; usually this echo will be indented to a point under or beyond the syllable it mimics and will function as an independent line of one or two syllables.”
Here is my beginner’s attempt!
FAMILY
left home at seventeen, did not look back
unpack
life unfolds- study, marry, children arrive
strive
challenges occur- divorce and illness
suppress
families of choice materialize
ties
ancient wounds healing, become whole again
when
belonging and connection do abound
love found
Cool poem. I haven’t tried this type before. The last 2 lines (4 with echo) are my favorite. “ancient wounds healing, become whole again when belonging and connection do abound – love found.” – Nice.
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I like those four lines too. It was fun to put it together. It changed many times over the day.
Be sure to look at Oliana’s poem since she’s a poet!
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You did good, Karuna! I only did my first try at this form and may try it again too. I sort of like the idea of using this form for Sreejit’s prompt…if not, I will try some poetic form of sorts since I am at my last week of OctPoWriMo.
ancient wounds make you stronger
longer
life to feel blessed
rest
of your life:)
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It was fun to do.
I look forward to reading your next one. And I really like what you wrote at the end of this comment!
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🙂
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Finally went with a haibun
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Lovely poem – short & sincere! ヾ(დ☣‿☣)ﾉ ヾ
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An interesting creative challenge, which you achieved admirably. You make family sound like a necessary teleological construct, something we need to embrace – whether through blood ties or love alone – in order to become whole.
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I had to look up telelogical to find out what it means. I like that you got that from my poem! And I think that IS a belief of mine.
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wow!
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I added post to my Reading List as this is something I would like to take a stab at in the future. Having followed your blog for a while, it matched what you have shared in past post about your family.
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Yes the content is similar to what I have shared in the past. I decided the way to make it new was to use a different form.
Take a look at Oliana’s poem so that you see the echo in a fuller form. https://tracesofthesoul.wordpress.com/2015/10/24/season-echo-verse/
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Loved your poem. So much, so simply stated.
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I had fun creating it although I feel like a kindergartner when I write poetry. It is nice to hear that you loved it.
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Really like your poem. Will take a look at Ollana’s poem also.
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